I need some advice?

[Anonymous]

I am setting up my care.com profile and I'm looking for input. Here is my profile. Does it intrigue you? I don't kmow if it sounds too repetive? Does it showcase my infant experience well? I also don't know if I should add that I'm looking for a position with an infant so I can grow with them long-term.

" Hi! I have devoted 9+ years to caring for children, including those born premature and with special needs. I have worked with children ( 6) from 6 0 to 4 years of age. I have a background in Early Childhood Development. I have potty-trained, created routines, sleep trained (for those who utilize), made homemade baby food, and taught baby sign language. I am highly reliable and have excellent references.

I work on achieving developmental milestones and reading. I engage daily with indoor (tummy time, reading, numbers, letters, vocabulary, etc.) and outdoor activities (classes, walks, etc.) I am adapted to various styles of child rearing and am happy to work with parents to meet their needs. My goal for your child is both to foster their development and education, as well as build a trusting bond. I'm adept at handling miscellaneous tasks and I am committed to supporting the well-being of the family.

My ideal family will be value open communication."

Please be honest and let me know if it's not that good.

[Anonymous]

I think you need to work on your confidence and self esteem. Please tell me in what possible way this ad could seem negative.

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:I am setting up my care.com profile and I'm looking for input. Here is my profile. Does it intrigue you? I don't kmow if it sounds too repetive? Does it showcase my infant experience well? I also don't know if I should add that I'm looking for a position with an infant so I can grow with them long-term.

" Hi! I have devoted 9+ years to caring for children, including those born premature and with special needs. I have worked with children ( 6) from 6 0 to 4 years of age. I have a background in Early Childhood Development. I have potty-trained, created routines, sleep trained (for those who utilize), made homemade baby food, and taught baby sign language. I am highly reliable and have excellent references.

I work on achieving developmental milestones and reading. I engage daily with indoor (tummy time, reading, numbers, letters, vocabulary, etc.) and outdoor activities (classes, walks, etc.) I am adapted to various styles of child rearing and am happy to work with parents to meet their needs. My goal for your child is both to foster their development and education, as well as build a trusting bond. I'm adept at handling miscellaneous tasks and I am committed to supporting the well-being of the family.

My ideal family will be value open communication."

Please be honest and let me know if it's not that good.

Other than the one thing I bolded, I think it is a good profile.

[Anonymous]

I found a few grammar errors. Proof read again ! Also you seem to be focusing mostly on babies . Do you not want to work with older kids ?

[Anonymous]

I'm a nanny, but I have also hired replacements for families and I would read you as very competent but maybe a bit self-important. It's a lot of "I am great because" sentences. I would reformat so that it's more a story of you as a person. So instead of I engage children with tummy time, etc., something like, "I am passionate about enriching the lives of my charges through XYZ and ABC because ai love to watch them learn and grow. Instead of listing ages, tell a bit about how you came to be a nanny and say "My experiences with my charges (ranging in age from X-Y have allowed me to use my ECD background and put my theory into practice through all the typical milestones--establishing routines, sleep training, potty training, etc."

I mean what you have is fine but doesn't show much personality.

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:I found a few grammar errors. Proof read again ! Also you seem to be focusing mostly on babies . Do you not want to work with older kids ?

I only work with children under 4. I need full-time and older children are in school.

[Anonymous]

Fix the last line regarding open communication.
There is an added word there.

Also I think it is perfect if you specify that you would prefer an infant that you can work with & grow with.
It shows that you are willing to commit long-term which is a highly desirable trait that many families desire!
It shows them a willingness for stability in your part too!

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:Fix the last line regarding open communication.
There is an added word there.

Also I think it is perfect if you specify that you would prefer an infant that you can work with & grow with.
It shows that you are willing to commit long-term which is a highly desirable trait that many families desire!
It shows them a willingness for stability in your part too!

How would you word it?

[Anonymous]

Does it sound repetitive? I prefer an MB's response.

[Anonymous]

Nothing grabbed my attention. I would be unlikely to message you compared to the rest of the candidates, unless you had a interesting photo in some way.

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:I'm a nanny, but I have also hired replacements for families and I would read you as very competent but maybe a bit self-important. It's a lot of "I am great because" sentences. I would reformat so that it's more a story of you as a person. So instead of I engage children with tummy time, etc., something like, "I am passionate about enriching the lives of my charges through XYZ and ABC because ai love to watch them learn and grow. Instead of listing ages, tell a bit about how you came to be a nanny and say "My experiences with my charges (ranging in age from X-Y have allowed me to use my ECD background and put my theory into practice through all the typical milestones--establishing routines, sleep training, potty training, etc."

I mean what you have is fine but doesn't show much personality.

I like this better.

It is kind of hard for me to believe that you have a college degree in ECD from what you wrote. You have a college education, and you are talking about your specific field of study to a group of educated, interested people that you want to impress. Say something interesting or novel. You must have thoughts and opinions on the subject of early childhood development. If nothing else, at least throw a few $5 words in there.

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:

Anonymous wrote:I'm a nanny, but I have also hired replacements for families and I would read you as very competent but maybe a bit self-important. It's a lot of "I am great because" sentences. I would reformat so that it's more a story of you as a person. So instead of I engage children with tummy time, etc., something like, "I am passionate about enriching the lives of my charges through XYZ and ABC because ai love to watch them learn and grow. Instead of listing ages, tell a bit about how you came to be a nanny and say "My experiences with my charges (ranging in age from X-Y have allowed me to use my ECD background and put my theory into practice through all the typical milestones--establishing routines, sleep training, potty training, etc."

I mean what you have is fine but doesn't show much personality.

I like this better.

It is kind of hard for me to believe that you have a college degree in ECD from what you wrote. You have a college education, and you are talking about your specific field of study to a group of educated, interested people that you want to impress. Say something interesting or novel. You must have thoughts and opinions on the subject of early childhood development. If nothing else, at least throw a few $5 words in there.

These sites make it hard to fit much in. They have a 100 maximum word count.

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:

Anonymous wrote:Fix the last line regarding open communication.
There is an added word there.

Also I think it is perfect if you specify that you would prefer an infant that you can work with & grow with.
It shows that you are willing to commit long-term which is a highly desirable trait that many families desire!
It shows them a willingness for stability in your part too!

How would you word it?

My ideal family would value open communication.

[Anonymous]

OP here. Thanks for all the advice! I revised it. What do you think?

" Hi! I have devoted 9+ years to working with children, including multiples, premature, and special needs. My experience with children from ages 0 to 4 have allowed me to put me to use my ECD background and put my theory into practice through all the typical milestones -- establishing routines, sleep training (for those who utilize), potty training, baby sign language, etc. I am reliable, active, and very organized.

I am dedicated to providing exceptional care and building a loving bond. I am passionate about participating in enriching activities (tummy time, reading, walks, classes etc.) because I love to watch them grow and learn. I am adapted to various styles of child rearing, and I am happy to work with parents to meet their needs. I'm adept at handling miscellaneous tasks ( love making homemade baby food!), and I am committed to supporting the well-being of the family!

I am seeking a full-time nanny position with an infant or toddler that will enable me to grow with a family long-term."

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:OP here. Thanks for all the advice! I revised it. What do you think?

" Hi! I have devoted 9+ years to working with children, including multiples, premature, and special needs. My experience with children from ages 0 to 4 have allowed me to put me to use my ECD background and put my theory into practice through all the typical milestones -- establishing routines, sleep training (for those who utilize), potty training, baby sign language, etc. I am reliable, active, and very organized.

I am dedicated to providing exceptional care and building a loving bond. I am passionate about participating in enriching activities (tummy time, reading, walks, classes etc.) because I love to watch them grow and learn. I am adapted to various styles of child rearing, and I am happy to work with parents to meet their needs. I'm adept at handling miscellaneous tasks ( love making homemade baby food!), and I am committed to supporting the well-being of the family!

I am seeking a full-time nanny position with an infant or toddler that will enable me to grow with a family long-term."

1. I found a typo
2. You only have one theory?
3. You have an early childhood background. But do you have a degree? If so, say that and say which degree specifically.
4. You start every single sentence with "I" or "My".