I need some advice?

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:

Anonymous wrote:OP here. Thanks for all the advice! I revised it. What do you think?

" Hi! I have devoted 9+ years to working with children, including multiples, premature, and special needs. My experience with children from ages 0 to 4 have allowed me to put me to use my ECD background and put my theory into practice through all the typical milestones -- establishing routines, sleep training (for those who utilize), potty training, baby sign language, etc. I am reliable, active, and very organized.

I am dedicated to providing exceptional care and building a loving bond. I am passionate about participating in enriching activities (tummy time, reading, walks, classes etc.) because I love to watch them grow and learn. I am adapted to various styles of child rearing, and I am happy to work with parents to meet their needs. I'm adept at handling miscellaneous tasks ( love making homemade baby food!), and I am committed to supporting the well-being of the family!

I am seeking a full-time nanny position with an infant or toddler that will enable me to grow with a family long-term."

1. I found a typo
2. You only have one theory?
3. You have an early childhood background. But do you have a degree? If so, say that and say which degree specifically.
4. You start every single sentence with "I" or "My".

How else is she suppose to start her sentences? She's talking about her experience and what she can offer.

[Anonymous]

.

[Anonymous]

You can avoid starting every sentence with "I" quite easily. For example, "Providing exceptional care...is my priority"; "Enriching activities fill our days because..."; "My education and prior experiences enable me to adapt to a variety of child rearing styles, which I implement based on the preferences of the parents and the best interests of the children"; "Miscellaneous tasks are handled with ease..."