We are saying the same thing. Leave it alone unless you pay a professional and find out that it truly is a lousy essay. If you don't get a professional opinion, then you can't tell you kid that it is a bad essay when the kid has finished it and been to see his teacher and counselor and discussed it. |
| What’s the book series?! |
OP here. I AM paying a professional. She didn't give topic advice whatsoever. She just dove in and started editing what DD already had written. |
maybe take a look at this thread? https://www.dcurbanmom.com/jforum/posts/list/1223607.page |
So you paid somebody and it’s been reviewed by her teacher(s)? You’re done here. Step away. |
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Unless your kid's topic is something completely insane...like writing about her heroin habit (not kicking her habit, but how much she loves her active habit) or how she fantasizes shooting up college campuses...the topic really doesn't matter.
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| Looking like a you problem OP |
This is a wild take, LOL! |
Literally any topic can make for good writing when it is done well. |
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I think that topic sounds fine.
Since she has "tippity top" grades/results in everything, I'm sure her essay will be "tippity top" too. |
People are being ridiculous, it is a totally reasonable worry. Mom is saying DC's essay is falling short, not adding what it could. Agree essays don't make up for scores and GPA but when it comes down to which qualified candidates who meet whatever random/never disclosed institutional priorities to take to the admission's committee having an essay that convey a real sense of individuality can certainly make a difference. |
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Colleges expect teens to write like teens. AOs are not looking for essays ghost written by parents in their forties and fifties.
Do yourself a favor and find some of those "50 successful Harvard admissions essays" type books or look up the best admissions essays included in various alumni magazines at top colleges. Read the essays and you'll be astonished. It is rare to read one that looks like the polished writing of a future Nobel Prize in literature winner. They are kids. They write like kids. |
| Does she use the expression "tippity top" in her essay? |
Haven't read those, but I've read a bunch of the NYT ones and the topics were surprisingly bad. One was about judging people based on their car bumper stickers! |
DP. That’s sounds like it could be funny. Remember that humans have to read hundreds if not thousands of these. Entertain them. |