Hi!

I'm a college essay consultant, and if I were working with your child, I would steer them away from this topic. Admissions officers want to make sure your child will be able to thrive at their school—including an essay about social exclusion could be considered a red flag. In addition, your proposed topic doesn't actually highlight any diversity, nor does it show any tangible growth.

A lot of families get stuck on the diversity/community essay, but I have yet to meet a student who can't write something both compelling and true to their identity. If you'd like to discuss this—or any other—essay in more detail, feel free to reach out!