Please help me write this email

[Anonymous]

Ok, here is the story: I was an intern for this organization, a couple of years ago. I think I did a very good job, and I got good feedback from the people there. I kept in touch with one of my supervisors, have her listed as a reference, and had a good rapport and feel pretty comfortable with her. The other one left for another org. but she was nice too. Anyway, I found a listing for a job opening for someone with my level of experience at this organization. I want to email this lady and essentially ask her if she knows the person who posted the job and if she can put in a good word for me, but I want to say it in a non-demanding way where she can gracefully say "no" if she doesn't want to. I feel like this is something I should already know, but I don't.

TIA very very much!!

[Anonymous]

I think you might want to email then call her:

Dear Susan,

I recently saw a posting listed for a XXX at X. I learned so much as your intern and had a such a great experience at X that I'm interested in learning more about the position.

If you have 10-15 minutes in your schedule, I'd love to call you and hear your thoughts on how I can put my best foot forward as a candidate. Is there a convenient time I can call you this week?

Sincerely,
Bobbie Jo

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:I think you might want to email then call her:

Dear Susan,

I recently saw a posting listed for a XXX at X. I learned so much as your intern and had a such a great experience at X that I'm interested in learning more about the position.

If you have 10-15 minutes in your schedule, I'd love to call you and hear your thoughts on how I can put my best foot forward as a candidate. Is there a convenient time I can call you this week?

Sincerely,
Bobbie Jo

This is perfect. Whoever posted this should create a company doing this sort of thing.

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:

Anonymous wrote:I think you might want to email then call her:

Dear Susan,

I recently saw a posting listed for a XXX at X. I learned so much as your intern and had a such a great experience at X that I'm interested in learning more about the position.

If you have 10-15 minutes in your schedule, I'd love to call you and hear your thoughts on how I can put my best foot forward as a candidate. Is there a convenient time I can call you this week?

Sincerely,
Bobbie Jo

This is perfect. Whoever posted this should create a company doing this sort of thing.

+1 - spot on!

[Anonymous]

I like 20:37's tone and message and only have two minor additions.

You might also benefit from refreshing her memory (it's horrible to admit but it's hard to keep interns straight after a few months) and emphasizing not what you learned but what you contributed to the project or company...

In the summer of 20XX, I did Y and Z for you. I learned so much from you and felt I really made a difference on your project (if you can detail your contributions, you should. e.g. "I really improved your report with my research.") I see your company has an opening (provide URL).

Would you have a few minutes to tell me more about this opportunity?

[Anonymous]

^^Ah, shucks. I'm an English teacher but I wouldn't mind doing something like this on the side. So much easier to write other people's cover letters, etc.

[Anonymous]

OP -- did you post this before without the email part? Maybe just asking if it was ok to contact her? I'm having serious deja vu.

[Anonymous]

OP here- no I never posted about this before, although when I called my cousin for advice she was also lost for what exactly to say, so I guess these types of things are hard to write for a lot of people!

Anyway, thanks so much pps! You guys are the best!!!

[Anonymous]

Anonymous wrote:OP -- did you post this before without the email part? Maybe just asking if it was ok to contact her? I'm having serious deja vu.

NP here - that post was actually me!