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[quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous]I am on care.com. I am not getting as much responses as I use to. Critique my profile ad.

Hi! I have devoted 8 years to caring for children, some of which were premature and special needs. I have worked with children (7 families, [b]8 babies) from 6 weeks - 3 years of age, including twins[/b].

I a a nanny who doesn't use TV as a form of entertainment. In addition to working on achieving developmental milestones and reading, various indoor (tummy time, singing, etc.) and outdoor activities (classes, walks, etc.) will be a frequent part of our days. [b]My experience caring for many children has given me the chance to adapt to various styles of child rearing. I recognize the importance of fostering a child's development and education and building a trusting bond. A great nanny not only provides good childcare, but she handles miscellaneous tasks in order to help maximize family time. I try to go above and beyond my tasks to provide the best service for each family.

I am seeking a long-term position with a family who values open communication and mutual respect![/b]

Be honest and et me know what improvements I can make to make myself more desirable.

Thank you. I appreciate your response and hep. I do write a nice message that I have been given compliments on.

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I'm a mom.  I've bolded what speaks to me.  I totally agree with other posters about highlight specifics (number of kids, years of experience, twin experience.)  I like that you highlight your ability to work within different styles and everything else you said in those few sentences, but you could probably edit a few works out of there if you need it.  Devote your limited space more to the details than to the overall flow of the prose (you write well - which is attractive to me, but if you have to sacrifice a bit give on the style, not the content.)

You could summarize something along the lines of "9 years of nannying experience, encompassing full scope of infant and toddler care, meal preparation, child laundry/bedroom/play space maintenance, and overall family support.  Skilled at working in varying family structures and philosophies, committed to supporting the well-being of the family."

You don't reference reliability, attendance record, whether your references are good, etc...  But a sentence (if honest) that speaks to those things would matter to me as I scan ads.

Another thing you can play with, which matters less to me but can be effective, is changing the "voice' you're using.  Write in a way that is less "I have, I am..." but more "I offer....  My role is to support the family, work with the parents on their goals for the kids, etc..."

Really your ad is not bad at all as it is, Care.com is just such a huge space that parents get flooded with options and it's overwhelming and the limited profiles can feel very generic.  Put some care into how you respond to ads that interest you - the applicants who sent me a thoughtful application, that was responsive to what I put in my ad and not just generic, REALLY stood out.  You write well so you would probably have a real advantage there.

Good luck![/quote][/quote]

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