Anonymous wrote:Anonymous wrote:If I am writing more than a paragraph I always start the email or memo with a sentence saying what action is requested and a brief statement of why.
“Hi all,
This email is to recommend that Director Larlo authorize me to inform XYZ corp that they need to redo their TPS filing for October because they failed to include an analysis of their teapot process.
…
“
This is very unclear.
Hi all, by copy of this email, I request that Larlo authorize me to... This action is necessary b/c they failed.
You put two fuzzy words in the first phrase and this one sentence says 3 things. I'm not saying it's bad prose but for an email and people with limited attention, my suggestion is better.
Anonymous wrote:In certain organizations (govt), it is common to start with BLUF (Bottom Line Up Front) and then follow up with the details
Anonymous wrote:“In short, …”
“To summarize, …”
“In conclusion, …”
Anonymous wrote:If I am writing more than a paragraph I always start the email or memo with a sentence saying what action is requested and a brief statement of why.
“Hi all,
This email is to recommend that Director Larlo authorize me to inform XYZ corp that they need to redo their TPS filing for October because they failed to include an analysis of their teapot process.
…
“
Anonymous wrote:“In short, …”
“To summarize, …”
“In conclusion, …”