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[quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous]DD is a junior and I guess has some hooks. URM, plays high level club soccer. Captain for 3 years. But she just tore her ACL so she will not be a recruited athlete. She wants to write her essay on finding her identity outside of soccer. Her friends think this is overdone and “cringey”, but she is pretty passionate about it. 
What do you think? Should I try to change her mind? 
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Not trying to be snarky, please review the rest of the posts where folks are trying to discourage parents from “gaming” the hook (essay as well).  Unless you are that app reader reading your DD’s essay, no one can give you a definitive answer, let along another 17 year old. While one AO may find the topic “cringey”, another may absolutely love it given the circumstances.  If your daughter is passionate about the topic, then let her do her thing.  This is not your ride but her first foray into charting her own path.  Don’t micromanage it.  If the schools don’t want to admit her because of essay, guess what, that really isn’t the school for her.  She will not be happy there as their values and priorities aren’t aligned.

Let the humanity and personality come through the essays and not worry so much about what makes for a “right”essay.[/quote]
Fair enough but be sure she has an editor re-read for quality, error-free writing regardless of the subject matter.  You can have the most amazing idea in the world for an essay and if the writing is poor, it will not help at all.[/quote]

PP here, agree.  Passion may get lost in bad grammar and poorly executed "voice".

Just be sure to let this be an exercise in these kids finding and expressing their own "voice".  I have to admit, DS grew leaps and bounds from end of Junior year to the end of the app .  He learned to self reflect deeply and to project his thoughts.   We saw this experience not as "getting into college", but as finding out who he was and where he would thrive.  He has no regrets at the end of the journey and we are proud of him for that.

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How did he work on his Voice?[/quote]

He wrote his essays and "forgot" about them for 2 weeks.  When he went back to them, he realized that they didn't "sound" like the authentic him.  The authentic him has not master the art of using big words, long sophisticated sentence structures and cool analogies.  So whatever he had put down sounded "wooden" (his words exactly) and rigid.  The authentic him loves his field of study and can talk about it for days on end.  So he rewrote them and stayed true to what that field meant to him and why.  He found that rewarding, not trying to fit the square-self into a "round" hole.  
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