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[quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous]Think of the ways your child could be considered a victim, if there are any. Sadly, I'm not kidding. [/quote]

^^This.  Sadly, truth. [/quote]

In the category of overcoming adversity.  I knew 2 kids - one whose Dad died of suicide and one whose mom and brother died in car crash - smart but also stood out in their essays.[/quote]

Ugh.   :roll:  Frankly, most people have a story or some kind of sadness in their lives.  If I read an essay about one of these things, I would just roll my eyes.  [/quote]

As someone who used to read these essays professionally, I can tell you that simply having any kind of sadness is not compelling. What is compelling is what the student did to overcome the adversity. It might be that they got up at 4:30 AM every day junior and senior year to make their way on public transportation from a homeless shelter to make it school where they tutored classmates for an hour before the 7:25 AM bell. My favorite essay was a girl who made and sold tamales after both parents were deported and left her in charge of 4 younger siblings. She didn’t go on and on about the deportation. She simply explained that was why she ended up running a profitable small business before she graduated HS. She talked about the skills it taught her and her younger siblings and helped them to have something positive to talk about during phone calls with the parents.[/quote]

Pretty powerful. But I can't imagine that people who ask about hooks on DCUM have a story that's anything like this. [/quote]

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