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[quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous][quote=Anonymous]This is what the president plans for air traffic control:

We're all gonna sit down and do a great computerized system for our control towers. Brand new. Not pieced together, obsolete, like it is, land-based. Trying to hook up a land-based system to a satellite system. The first thing that some experts told me when this happened is you can't hook up land to satellites and you can't hook up satellites to land. It doesn't work. We spend billions of billions of dollars trying to renovate an old, broken system, instead of just saying cut it loose, and let's spend less money and build a great system done by two or three companies, very good companies, specialists, that's all it is. They used 39 companies. That means that 39 different hookups have to happen. And I don't know how many people of you are good in terms of all of the kinds of things necessary for that. And it's very complex stuff. But when you have 39 different companies working on hooking up different cities at different people. You need one company. With one set of equipment. And there are some countries that have unbelievable air controller systems. And they would've, bells would've gone off when that helicopter literally even hit the same height. Because it traveled a long distance before it hit. It was just like, just wouldn't stop. Follow the line. But bells and whistles would've gone off. They have 'em where it actually could virtually turn the thing around. It would've just never happened if we had the right equipment.
And one of things that's gonna be, l'm gonna speaking to John and to Mike and to Chuck and everybody, we have to get together and just as a single bill just pass where we get the best control system. When I land in my plane, privately, l use a system from another country because my captain tells me, I'm landing in New York and I'm using a sys- I won't tell you what country, but l use a system from another country because the captain says 'This thing is so bad, it's so obsolete.' And we can't have that.[/quote]

I put this in Chat GPT for analysis…

Spoken Language Analysis

When analyzing this passage as spoken language, we focus on speech patterns, coherence, fluency, and effectiveness in communication, rather than strict grammatical correctness.

Vocabulary Level (Spoken Language):
	•	The vocabulary remains simple and conversational, likely at a 5th to 7th-grade level.
	•	There is repetition (“brand new,” “obsolete,” “broken system”) and informal phrasing (“we’re all gonna sit down,” “bells and whistles would’ve gone off”).
	•	The speaker uses basic terminology instead of technical terms, which may make the speech more accessible to a general audience but less precise.

Grammar and Fluency (Spoken Language):
	•	The grammar is informal, with sentence fragments, run-ons, and unfinished thoughts.
	•	The structure is disorganized, with frequent topic shifts (jumping from outdated systems to using foreign technology to legislative action).
	•	The speech contains filler words (“and,” “because,” “it’s so bad”) and self-corrections (“I use a system from another country because my captain tells me, I’m landing in New York and I’m using a sys- I won’t tell you what country…”), which are typical in spontaneous speech.
	•	The lack of subject-verb agreement and incomplete comparisons (“there are some countries that have unbelievable air controller systems”) make some points difficult to follow.

Coherence and Effectiveness in Speech:
	•	The message is clear in broad strokes (advocating for a more modernized air traffic control system), but the delivery is unfocused and repetitive.
	•	The use of anecdotal evidence (personal experience landing in New York) might appeal to an audience emotionally but lacks hard data or specifics.
	•	The jump between ideas (“bells and whistles would’ve gone off,” then suddenly discussing legislation) makes it harder to track the main point.
	•	The phrase “39 different hookups have to happen” is vague and lacks context, making it difficult to grasp the intended technical argument.

Accuracy of Information (Spoken Context):
	•	The statement about land-based systems not connecting to satellites is incorrect—modern satellite-based air traffic control systems do integrate with ground systems.
	•	The claim about foreign systems being used for private landings is unclear—while some international air traffic systems are more modern, pilots landing in the U.S. must still rely on domestic FAA systems.
	•	The exaggeration of 39 companies working on different hookups lacks specific evidence and makes the argument seem imprecise.

Summary (Spoken Context):
	•	Vocabulary Level: Simple (~5th to 7th grade), informal, and repetitive.
	•	Grammar & Structure: Disorganized with fragmented and run-on sentences, typical of impromptu speech.
	•	Fluency & Coherence: Main message is understandable but frequently loses focus, making it harder to follow.
	•	Accuracy: Some statements are misleading or incorrect, relying more on emotional appeal than factual precision.

This speech reflects an unscripted, conversational style, likely meant for a general audience rather than a technical or policymaking one. While it conveys a broad concern about air traffic control inefficiencies, the lack of structure, factual inconsistencies, and imprecise language reduce its overall effectiveness.
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For comparison, I did the same for Biden speaking about air traffic as well…

Vocabulary Grade Level:

The vocabulary in this passage is at an 8th to 10th-grade reading level. It uses mostly accessible words, but occasionally introduces slightly more complex terminology (e.g., “reimbursement,” “finalized,” “upfront”). The language is straightforward but still formal enough to convey authority and policy, making it appropriate for a general audience, including the general public and potentially professionals in the airline or governmental sectors.

Grammar/Language Level:
	•	Grammar: The passage is generally well-structured for spoken language, with a few informal elements like interruptions, self-corrections, and occasional sentence fragments. However, the language remains relatively formal and organized overall, appropriate for a presidential address. Some run-on sentences and informal phrasing (e.g., “Well, guess what happened?” or “That’s not all.”) make it sound more conversational but not overly casual. There are minimal errors, such as the “frees” instead of “fees,” but these don’t detract significantly from the message.
	•	Language/Style: The language is persuasive and approachable, using repetition for emphasis (e.g., “That’s real savings for middle-class and working-class families”). It balances informal conversational tone with formal policy statements, making it accessible yet authoritative.

Accuracy:
	•	Overall Accuracy: The passage is largely accurate in its claims about recent changes in airline policies, such as refunds, rebooking, and compensation. It correctly highlights improvements made by airlines in response to customer dissatisfaction and government pressure.
	•	Specific Accuracy:
	•	The claim about $50 billion of assistance during the pandemic is accurate and well-documented.
	•	The statements about airlines changing their seating and rebooking policies to allow for free family seating and free rebooking are correct.
	•	Holiday disruptions mentioned (stranded travelers, cancellations) refer to real events in recent years (e.g., Southwest Airlines’ 2022 holiday meltdown). However, this is not universal to all airlines, but the speech correctly points to broader industry-wide issues.

Summary:
	•	Vocabulary Level: 8th to 10th grade—approachable but professional.
	•	Grammar/Language Level: Clear, mostly formal with conversational elements, suitable for public speaking.
	•	Accuracy: Largely accurate in reflecting recent airline policies and industry challenges, with minimal exaggeration or oversimplification.

The passage is effective for a general audience, both informative and persuasive while remaining accessible and credible.[/quote]

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